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thistlechaserLove's a Bitch and Then He Dies by Harry Potter Wiccan
Christiania was the latest in a long line of Viscardis to attend Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. She was a tall, blonde beauty, whose pale blue eyes seemed to pierce one’s very soul. With her vanilla complexion and delicate, regal features, it was easy to mistake her for a Veela. Like all Viscardis before her, she was sorted into Slytherin House.
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That summary is just so many kinds of painful...
I'm skimming it, just to see how bad it really is. The summary is actually the first paragraph. The second:
The Viscardis were an old, respected wizarding family. They claimed pureblood heritage and fabulous wealth. They owned a sprawling estate in Ireland, an apartment in Upper Diagon Alley, and a townhouse in the heart of Paris. Despite her every wish granted and servants to wait on her hand and foot, Christiania was generally down-to-earth and modest.
See for yourself!
Christiania was the latest in a long line of Viscardis to attend Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. She was a tall, blonde beauty, whose pale blue eyes seemed to pierce one’s very soul. With her vanilla complexion and delicate, regal features, it was easy to mistake her for a Veela. Like all Viscardis before her, she was sorted into Slytherin House.
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That summary is just so many kinds of painful...
I'm skimming it, just to see how bad it really is. The summary is actually the first paragraph. The second:
The Viscardis were an old, respected wizarding family. They claimed pureblood heritage and fabulous wealth. They owned a sprawling estate in Ireland, an apartment in Upper Diagon Alley, and a townhouse in the heart of Paris. Despite her every wish granted and servants to wait on her hand and foot, Christiania was generally down-to-earth and modest.
See for yourself!
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Date: 2003-07-14 01:40 pm (UTC):)
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Date: 2003-07-14 01:50 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2003-07-14 03:06 pm (UTC)Yeesh. It's reasonably well-written (no glaring errors and exceptable grammar), so *why* must the author waste good words on such cliched crap?
On second thoughts, her A/N reads 'THANK'S A BILLION TO Three_Pointer for his help on this fic and his major involvment in in to .' I'd hate to read the unbetaed prologue.
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Date: 2003-07-14 03:07 pm (UTC)*Bangs head*
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Date: 2003-07-14 03:18 pm (UTC)And don't you wish you could edit comments? :)
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Date: 2003-07-14 03:37 pm (UTC)Thank's four you're involvment of notising mine mistacks!
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Date: 2003-07-14 04:43 pm (UTC)